This is a cute poem, Jennifer, rather than a good one. I liked the line 'ripped ribbon helices' a lot, but the jingly-jangly rhyming turns this into a Christmas scene inside a paperweight. I used to write poems like this too, so I am not singling you out or, in my eyes, being overly critical. As one of my poetry teachers said, "I know you can do better." I'm sure you have many good poems; I just think this one is a dud.
